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Dreamless « Thread Started on Jun 14, 2007, 3:32pm »
What happens to dreams when they die? Do they rot like maggot ravaged flesh or blister and burn dessicated by the sun; disintegrating dust? Are they bloated and disfigured seeping out of cellophane skin?
Do dead dreams have a heaven? Do they have a soul that lives and gets to be realized, so i can pass a stranger and wonder if they're living my robbed, reincarnated dreams?
All my dreams are dead. Their carcasses flung legs over head one on top of the next in some putrid, gaping, holocaust trench. No memorials or monuments, just nameless, faceless, corpses of dreams.
It was YOU! YOU who once cradled my dreams, soft and secure in slumber. And you who swiftly suffocated them tightening the garotte as their eyes bulged and blood vessels burst and they struggled, starving for breath. And I am left, worthless, empty, and dreamless.
« Last Edit: Jun 14, 2007, 5:48pm by freedomchild »
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #1 on Jun 14, 2007, 4:52pm »
Fascinating ....and shocking at the same time....I don't like to think of My lovely Sunshine girl writing off her dreams as lost. But wouldn't it be wild if they were like souls, reborn in someone else? Love that thought.... all the imagery is potent here but this one most of all:
Their carcasses flung legs over head one on top of the next in some putrid, gaping, holocaust trench.
Sheesh, I've seen the pics too...horrifying.
Garotte or Garrote are the usual US spellings but even the Brits have an e at the end Garrotte...never seen it without.
Excellent poem darling...you have lost none of your power to stun.
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #2 on Jun 14, 2007, 5:48pm »
Hey darling - thanks much for fixing my spello and for offering up such a nice comment. I suppose solitary is good for writing I've had so much time out here with nothing to do that I had no choice but to sit there and come up with something It's been a while. I'm glad it lived up to my old standards luv u!
And silence contagious in moments like these, consumed me and strengthened my will to appease. The passion that sparked me one terrible night, shocked and persuaded my soul to ignite. ~Tom Marshall
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #3 on Jun 14, 2007, 10:22pm »
Hi Gina!
Welcome back! Very powerful and harsh stuff indeed--it reminds me, forgive me-- a great deal of a poem by a black writer--Langston HUghes maybe--where he asks where dreams go--and forsees them drying up, "like a raisin in the sun". A play was written with that title.....
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #4 on Jun 15, 2007, 12:47am »
Hey glenn - nice to see you again as well. Although I appreciate the comment - I don't think I could ever conceivably compare my writing to Hughes - he was just too good - but it's funny that you mention "A raisin in the sun" - it's one of my favorite poems- and I never even thought of it when I was writing this. I wonder if it wasn't something subliminal. When I was writing this - being a former forensic science major - I was thinking of the various stages of decomposition - and the kinds of decomposition that occur in different environments. I appreciate your comment - and I am glad to be back sunshine, gina
And silence contagious in moments like these, consumed me and strengthened my will to appease. The passion that sparked me one terrible night, shocked and persuaded my soul to ignite. ~Tom Marshall
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #5 on Jun 15, 2007, 12:57am »
Huggles Ginaboo,
It is so nice to see you writing /posting again. As has been said, this is very strong on the imagery. It certainly jumps off the page at you. Many thanks for sharing....... Skip
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #6 on Jun 16, 2007, 12:12pm »
Hey skipper It's so nice to pop back in and still see all my old friends Thanks much for the comment - and I'm hoping that things work out so I can stay here a while sunshine gina
And silence contagious in moments like these, consumed me and strengthened my will to appease. The passion that sparked me one terrible night, shocked and persuaded my soul to ignite. ~Tom Marshall
Re: Dreamless « Reply #7 on Jun 18, 2007, 2:59am »
Your words released a Pandora's box of feelings that I have kept locked away deep within a dark place in my soul. Excellent but painful (for me any way) imagery.
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #8 on Jun 18, 2007, 9:10am »
Hi JD Very powerful metaphore and a well written poem. I think, to varying extents, we all have this kind of frustration which grows to desperation and bitterness as we get older, and the dreams indeed seem unrecoverable.
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #12 on Jun 20, 2007, 10:57pm »
Brandy - I thank you for commenting and writing this was cathartic for me as well. I'm glad on the one hand that I was able to elicit the emotions I was trying to convey, and sad at the same time that I made you feel badly.
Wally - no problem on the name snafu and I appreciate your words
M - your poem was lovely, but unfortunately, when I was writing mine - I wrote what I thought was happening to my dreams....not nearly as light hearted as yours. I appreciate your posting and enjoyed your poem, despite the fact that our dreams aren't seeing eye to eye right now lol sunshine, gina
And silence contagious in moments like these, consumed me and strengthened my will to appease. The passion that sparked me one terrible night, shocked and persuaded my soul to ignite. ~Tom Marshall
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Re: Dreamless « Reply #13 on Jun 21, 2007, 2:47am »
I know, Sugarplum.....the main reason I posted the poem was to try and lift your spirits a bit. Just take it easy, Hon, you know every dark cloud has a silver lining even though you may not see it right now. Hugglies, M
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