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« Thread Started on Jul 13, 2005, 2:46am » | |
I am posting this for Tom (everyone else has probably seen it before on other sites)
Howling Blaze
This unremitting torture
Rips the sinews of my soul
It takes me, drawn and quartered,
To the deepest, darkest hole
Then drowns me in a black fire,
Gives my eye to ghastly glaze,
Sends my senses to Damnation
And the noxious howling blaze
Such cruel, incessant terror
In the cauldron coals of Hell
Is the punishment for looking
Past the grating of my cell
Thrust a dagger into my fool heart
And give the gruesome twist,
Start me plummeting to mortal fury
Through the howling mist
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« Reply #1 on Jul 13, 2005, 5:07am » | |
Wonderf words full of fire dark and brooding , great rhyming and flow...
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« Reply #2 on Jul 13, 2005, 12:32pm » | |
The imagery is "very" dark here. I think I would not want to be this person. Drawn and quartered and taken somewhere where I don't want to be. To me it sounds like a captured person who sees the end and then gets murdered.
Could have other conotations such as feeling this way inside the mind. Feeling trapped, in hell, like someone is taking the life from you.
Overall creepy...lol...ty for posting it RT
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« Reply #3 on Jul 13, 2005, 3:03pm » | |
I was showing how you can choose different fonts etc and when i came back my eyes just couldnt take the glare hahah.
Tom, thank you for your read. It was certainly related to your second paragraph and was written whilst in deep depression once, yet if I had to feel so depressed again to get a poem of which i am so proud, I guess I would accept it. Poets get their inspiration from anywhere and I guess we can't complain when we do!!
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« Reply #4 on Jul 16, 2005, 9:58am » | |
Wow - remind me never to get on your bad side 
I loved how the rhyme never seemed forced here. The imagery was exceptionally powerful in this wonderfully polished piece.
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« Reply #6 on Jul 18, 2005, 8:50pm » | |
i was looking at the spacing. why are they all so separated? its as if
every
word
was
in
this
form.
it was strange to read.
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« Reply #8 on Jul 21, 2005, 2:10pm » | |
better.
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« Reply #10 on Jul 22, 2005, 9:47am » | |
GUMDROPS!
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« Reply #11 on Jul 29, 2005, 3:08am » | |
I liked this piece but it frightens me, alot...  . Anyway, I thought it flowed really well. But I don't partcularily agree with the use of the word soul. However, I love "sinews" and "noxious" and "ghastly" and "gruesome." They're really strong and add that a powerful aspect to this poem.
love ya, sarah
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« Reply #13 on Jul 29, 2005, 10:08pm » | |
I don't agree with the use of the word soul in this context [although the poem is quite well written and strong with or without it] because it's cliche and doesn't grasp the reader's attention. However, there are plently of other grabbers!
love ya lots sarah
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« Reply #14 on Jul 30, 2005, 4:32am » | |
I am mulling that over, my friend... agree we all use soul a little too much these days...if anyone else has thoughts on its use in this poem, I would be interested to hear...but yes, yes, I am considering changing it...just can't decide yet.
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