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GARDENER'S BREW
« Thread Started on Sept 4, 2008, 1:36pm »		[Quote]
GARDENER’S BREW

To toil in a garden - such an arduous pleasure,
with a climate like ours where we barely can measure
the downfall of raindrops, feeble flowers,
and of this gardener too;

Memories of childhood when gardening was easy,
we’re helping Mummy - that lemonade was so squeezy -
to till and to weed and pick all the veg;
we were her green-fingered crew.

Since, we’ve made our fortune, now we are retired,
slip back through the ages, recall times we admired,
glow with the effort, aubergine colour,
then retire - hurt - for a much stronger brew !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Challenge words : toil garden arduous pleasure
climate memories till fortune aubergine
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« Reply #1 on Sept 5, 2008, 2:19am »		[Quote]
Bump - was buried under all the "moved" ones !

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« Reply #2 on Sept 5, 2008, 3:03am »		[Quote]
The metre was a little wayward and the space between rhymes a little like the bridge too far...but I enjoyed the comparison...oddly enough, you hit upon the one drink, apart from an occasional illicit coffee, that I drink constantly....diluted lemon juice (which in the States is called lemonade)

Well done for meeting the challenge, Alan!
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« Reply #3 on Sept 5, 2008, 11:00am »		[Quote]
Gday Alan, an unusual rhyme scheme that oddly enough worked as I read on. As per, you have met the challenge well and I think my favourite lines were....Since, we’ve made our fortune, now we are retired,
slip back through the ages, recall times we admired,

Many thanks for sharing....... Skip
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« Reply #4 on Sept 14, 2008, 10:39am »		[Quote]
Dear Dawn and Skip,

My goodness, after complaining, I never answered your comments. So sorry.

Dawn, the rhyme scheme is constant, if wierd, as Skip says. Each verse has a couplet, and the 3 last lines rhyme too.

Thanks, Skip, I thought the rhymes worked too, so glad to have the confirmation.

Love
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« Reply #6 on Mar 24, 2009, 5:32am »		[Quote]
Ha! Love your words and so apt at this time of year, when eveyone seems to have grown green fingers. You know Alan, if ever I am feeling down I think I should just come read you, as your words always make a smile appear on my face.
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